He smiles, I die, deep inside. A
I have feelings for him that I cannot hide. A
My thoughts wander around an endless dream. B
One where my smile beams. B
Where I fantasize holding his hand. C
That life I could withstand. C
Wishing I could kiss his captivating lips. D
For in that moment my heart would skip. D
To be wrapped in his arms, up so tight. E
Then I would be able to sleep at night. E
His eyes like crystal make me melt. F
As he looks at me the heat is felt. F
The scent of cologne escapes his chest. G
To know him, I am very blessed. G
For my feelings, never so strong, except for he. H
I wish he knew how much he means to me. H
Euphony
End Rhyme (Letters or Rhyme Scheme) (AABBCCDDEEFFGGHH)
Assonance: the vowel I (sound)
Wow, Eleanor, this is really deep! I especially like how it seems as if you have been working on this for such a long time, yet you do such a great job of summarizing your romance (maybe it's yours, I don't know) that it was done in a very captivating, short and sweet manner.
ReplyDeleteI love the techniques that you used as well as how well your poem flowed. Your poem seems really though out, and developed.
ReplyDeleteI think you meant "cologne" not "colon". May wanna revise that.
ReplyDeleteEleanor,
ReplyDeleteThis piece is wonderful. It really is. The rhyme scheme and techniques used are superb. With a piece like this, it leaves us wondering who your talking about.... :P